Pitch 2

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ejQIzVH3mN4&feature=youtu.be

I added how big the market was, took the fluff out of my intro, and tried to make all my points more concise/only shared what I thought truly mattered.  I tried to fix everything Dr. Pryor provided me in his feedback.

Comments

  1. Aubrey HoffmanOctober 27, 2018 at 9:07 PM

    Sydney, I think this was fantastic! You were definitely able to get to your idea more quickly and I think it made it more effective. I also think that your intro was great, you did not ramble and told the viewer the most important points. The only suggestion I would have is to smile more and let your personality shine through just a little more. Great job!

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  2. UnknownOctober 28, 2018 at 11:15 AM

    Sydney,

    You did such an excellent job on this pitch! I loved getting to see how much your ability to describe this product has improved since our first elevator pitch assignment. I agree that Dr. Pryor's feedback is a great source of improvement, and I'm glad you were able to integrate some of this feedback. You were very successful in being concise and only sharing the points that matter most. Great work!

    Zach

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  3. UnknownOctober 29, 2018 at 9:40 PM

    Hello Sydney,

    I think you did a nice job! I am glad that you have made improvements in your elevator pitch. Taking out the fluff in your pitch and making concise points helps your information come across more clearly. I like to see that your product is developing. I also tried to integrate what others told me I should change in order to make my elevator pitch more polished.

    Regards,

    Ramar

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  4. Emily HusakOctober 29, 2018 at 11:28 PM

    Hi Sydney,
    Nice job on tweaking your elevator pitch. Your points were more concise and it sounded more professional and confident. It's interesting to see your product evolve throughout these assignments. You were able to get across the points that were most important. Your second time was much more polished. Best, Emily

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